Very good. A man must face his battles, whether he knows why they are there or not. Be careful who you trust. Do not give up what you know to be rightfully yours, your calling or your sword. The door to 'freedom' may not be as it seems. Trying to end all the easy way cannot work. You must follow your calling despite the amount of information or guidance you have. What I miss?
You are too kind. Reminds me a little of the movie Momento. Nonetheless, in your story, I appreciated trying to gain awareness as the character was gaining awareness. Trying and doing something different each time, yet the environment changes as well. Two monsters in the story, the obvious one, who happens to talk, and the deceptive woman. The sand, the sword, the plant, and the pictures. All drawing us in to know more about the situation with a little alliteration. And the desire to know why keeps you engaged until the end. Why is he there? The constant desire to know but also being forced to table the why until for the circumstances at hand. And then, not killing the woman, who is probably the worst monster to go back and face the big monster... as well as the unknown, which may be the 3rd a biggest monster of them all. The woman knows but withholds the unknown, which makes her very beastly. The monster may or may not know the unknown but is seemingly acting within its nature. The man... hero? victim? villain? By what we can tell he has some character despite his situation. Is he forgivable? TBD. I wonder what obstacles the monster and the woman could represent in real life. The Republican and Democratic party, for example? Great story, thanks for sharing.
Very good. A man must face his battles, whether he knows why they are there or not. Be careful who you trust. Do not give up what you know to be rightfully yours, your calling or your sword. The door to 'freedom' may not be as it seems. Trying to end all the easy way cannot work. You must follow your calling despite the amount of information or guidance you have. What I miss?
You already found more than I did while writing it.
You are too kind. Reminds me a little of the movie Momento. Nonetheless, in your story, I appreciated trying to gain awareness as the character was gaining awareness. Trying and doing something different each time, yet the environment changes as well. Two monsters in the story, the obvious one, who happens to talk, and the deceptive woman. The sand, the sword, the plant, and the pictures. All drawing us in to know more about the situation with a little alliteration. And the desire to know why keeps you engaged until the end. Why is he there? The constant desire to know but also being forced to table the why until for the circumstances at hand. And then, not killing the woman, who is probably the worst monster to go back and face the big monster... as well as the unknown, which may be the 3rd a biggest monster of them all. The woman knows but withholds the unknown, which makes her very beastly. The monster may or may not know the unknown but is seemingly acting within its nature. The man... hero? victim? villain? By what we can tell he has some character despite his situation. Is he forgivable? TBD. I wonder what obstacles the monster and the woman could represent in real life. The Republican and Democratic party, for example? Great story, thanks for sharing.
What a great story!
Thanks for reading.